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  • Hi Sarah,

    Great effort, minor comments such as misalignment of images and text – particularly column on right. Also, there are a lot of words at the moment, could be a bit more simplified. Also like your analogy! It made me chuckle.

  • Great use of subheadings to break up the information. The information flows very well and is engaging. Great pictures and diagrams

  • Your diagrams are really good. Great analogy with the party, really helps you communicate your point. In the paragraph, ‘Why do I care, you ask’, I think the “(intro to pest problem)” is from your drafting process, and do you mean “distributed” instead of “distrusted”? I also think your article feels unfinished with the way it ends – it would benefit from a definite conclusion to link back to your introduction + the overall pest problem. Otherwise, a great article!

  • Great work, very informative and interesting to read. You might get marked down for too much text.

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